I am a Year 6 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Kia Ora Marsali, Nevaeh here from Hornby High School I was just looking through you blog and this blog post caught my eye, because of the bright colors and because in one of my classes I have been learning about Friendships and Kindness. I was thinking you could add an introduction like you other blogs, this will bring in the readers even more. Maybe some images for the eyes becasue all you really see is words and sometime people like to see it as well, just a suggestion. Have a good day
Hi Marsali, I 100% agree with Nevaeh a written intro would of helped that little bit more. I also noticed a grammer mistake perhaps even a spelling mistake, dictate may of just put the wrong words in. It was your last outro.... The kindness you always...... It would be great if you could put what it is that you wanted to say. Stay awesome and be kind.
Kia ora Marsali. Kindness is so important and we probably could do with a bit more of it around the world. I notice that you have quite a bit of space left in your Google drawing so you could elaborate and add more of an explanation or add some images that show what you mean.
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Kia Ora Marsali, Nevaeh here from Hornby High School
ReplyDeleteI was just looking through you blog and this blog post caught my eye, because of the bright colors and because in one of my classes I have been learning about Friendships and Kindness. I was thinking you could add an introduction like you other blogs, this will bring in the readers even more. Maybe some images for the eyes becasue all you really see is words and sometime people like to see it as well, just a suggestion.
Have a good day
Nevaeh
thanks Nevaeh
Deletethank you for telling me how to inprove
my blog thank you for telling me what should I add and
I had be fast thank you
Marsali
Hi Marsali, I 100% agree with Nevaeh a written intro would of helped that little bit more. I also noticed a grammer mistake perhaps even a spelling mistake, dictate may of just put the wrong words in. It was your last outro.... The kindness you always...... It would be great if you could put what it is that you wanted to say. Stay awesome and be kind.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Marsali.
ReplyDeleteKindness is so important and we probably could do with a bit more of it around the world. I notice that you have quite a bit of space left in your Google drawing so you could elaborate and add more of an explanation or add some images that show what you mean.